Down, Down, Down

 Hello Hello!  

Ok, yes, posting on the right day, but, sadly, just one drawing today, but I think it's a good one.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Page 107

So what makes this a good one?  A few things... that first panel with Fancy's jet careening toward the landscape is dynamic and the trailing jets help show where her jet has come from, and the number of pursing jets is pretty threatening.

The panel of inside the cockpit has a really nice drawing of Fancy.  She looks cartoony, but I think I like this design the best.  It suits the story style.

And that last panel... WHAAAA?!  She's heading for a barn?  OH NO!!!

I also like the dialogue.  Fancy sounds calm, in the first panel.  Then talking to Dave brings him back into the picture (even though we don't see him here), which is important because we need to keep all the players still in the audience's mind.  And then the fact that he warns her about the barn before we, the audience see it is fun and startling. 

Things I could have fixed/improved on?  I think the first panel should have a bit of a dutch tilt, but I was having enough trouble drawing the landscape in perspective amid the lines printed on the paper! And the angle on the last panel is bit high. Might look better if the camera angle were lower and we could see more into the barn, to better suggest Fancy's trajectory.

Anyway, hope you like it.

Going Down

Hello All!  That is... everyone who isn't trying to get me to post non-Flight-of-Fancy comments here!

And yes, I'm probably getting those messages because I haven't posted in a week nor looked at my email to see who else posted comments, like you, IG!  Thanks for the encouragement and ongoing enthusiasm for this silly project!

So, to reward your patience, here are two pages!  

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Page 105

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Page 106

"WHAT?!" I can hear you saying..."I had to wait two weeks for that and it took 10 seconds to read?!"

Ok, fair point. Let's talk about this.

Good drawings, right?!  Character designs are consistent.  Good movement across the pages and through the panels. Dynamic camera angles, check check check.

Yes, you're right, IG, I also think I forgot to put in a 3rd (conventional) jet in the top right panel of page 105. Easily fixed, but I figured I'd leave it for now. I like the "quiet" middle panel there.  It adds space and a bit of a pause and works well with the last panel there on 105, which again, slows the action a bit and adds a bit of anticipation, like "why's it so quiet in here" before... BOOOM!  Page 106!

Or should I say "KiiSH".  Yeah, I didn't know what sound effect to use there and I think I've over-used "BOOM".  But I like this page, it's right back into the action.  I like how the enemy missiles make a different sound (FFFSSSSS sounds very futuristic, doesn't it?!).

That first panel should probably be flipped horizontally to preserve the flow, but... as you can see in this quick bodge...

... the missiles need to be on the left side of the panel so they get seen and read before seeing the jet get hit.

And the "Going down" panel is really cool.  Good trail of smoke that suggests how Fancy's little jet is tumbling down toward... farm fields?! Hope she can get outta this mess.

Going to War

 Hello Readers,

Here's another installment.  Gotta say, what with the current news, I question creating a story like this... I mean, war isn't supposed to be fun.  But, I'm in it this far, let's try to finish this up, right?

And then I'll go on to another one of my stories... and yes, it has war and conflict in it too!

 

 

 

 

 

 

Page 104

Pretty solid drawings throughout. 

The middle left panel is fun in that we can get a good idea of the comparative size of the jets - Fancy's is SOOO small!  I was juggling the placement of panels but needed to pay more attention to the dialogue.  I think it should read something like "That jet is so small it's amazing we even tagged you."

The middle right panel is quite nicely drawn.  It was kinda hard to draw to show her reaching up to touch the canopy.  I don't really like drawings with extreme foreshortening, so I didn't want to draw her hand close to the camera and the rest of her body back from it.  I think the one I drew works well... believe it or not I tried a bunch of  hand poses, but this one was most readable while keeping the bullet hole/burn visible.

Ohh, and that stern face in the last panel... looks like Fancy's has taken the gloves off.  Look out, Lawrence!  I wonder how it will end.  If you know, IG, please tell me!

Coming Around

 Hello Readers!

Well, I was trying to slow down posting pages, but these two really had to go together to keep the continuity.  Here they are, I hope you like them.

Page 102

 

 

 

 

 

Page 103

I really like that top panel on 102, seeing so many planes lifting off and scattering at once.  That sure would be something to see.  The next two panels were a bit of a challenge because I wanted really fast action, like BAM BAM BAM.  

As I mentioned at the start, I posted these two pages to keep continuity, and it is from the action on 102 to 103 and Jake's comment "We blew right past 'em", that needed to be kept together to help explain what happened.  

And the fast action continues, and I think it's pretty fun action too.  

The drawings throughout are good.  I still need to revise the design of Lawrence's little jets - they don't look good in a number of angles, not iconic or recognizable enough.  Also they don't look tough enough.

Maybe you noticed I've Fancy's AR goggles are transparent here.  I realized the audience needed to see her eyes, so in this page and the following ones we see her eyes.  I'll have to come up with some tech-y like stuff around the edges of the frames, like circuitry or chips or something.

And looking at page 103, I crossed the axis between the close shot of Fancy and her jet getting tagged.  Looks like I need to flip those first 4 panels all horizontally. 

Lifting Off

Hello Long Suffering (and still Faithful) Readers!

Here's page 101, relatively hot off the pencil!

 

Page 101

I recall you (I.Ghost) have commented that you go through these pages too fast.  Well there is lostsa writing on this page, so that might slow you down a bit.

As mentioned previously, these past few pages have been rather hard, and looking at this one, I think I know more why that is so.  There's a few different threads and groups of characters and action all coming together here and it was a challenge to juggle them and present each bit in an understandable, logical way.

I like the establishing shot at the top left, to bring us back to Fancy, and then Fancy in that little jet talking to Dave (sorry about his "Checking" comment being so hard to see (and easy fix in cleanup... not that doesn't mean I've decided to clean this thing up).  

I like those next two panels - establishing shot of the control tower and then the traffic controller.  The text / dialogue isn't entirely clear about who's coming, but I hope if you read these pages in close succession you'd know who is being referred to (it's Lawrence and his armada of course!!!)

The last panel was a tough one to figure out how to draw.  A down shot of the planes taking off (as you see here) works well, but I think it is too small.  The panel needs more vertical space and with that I would have been able to draw some of the airplanes nosing up more, to better suggest they are taking off.