Hello Readers,
Yes, I missed posting last week. I'm SAAAAWRY, ok?! Yes, I'm not crazy busy so what got in my way, right? Jeez you're tough. Ok, you're right, I had no good excuse except that sometimes I feel like I have no idea how to finish this story and I'm really doubting myself and how to wrap this up so I guess I've been procrastinating and letting playing with the dog while listening to evening news get in the way of my precious drawing time.
Maybe these two pages and a bit of extra something will shut you up. WHAA?! I didn't say that! Just look at the pretty pictures, would'ja?
Page 120
Page 121
I saw a presentation recently in which someone was talking about the various shots we use in cinematography and I realized I've not been using the close-up enough. So in the first two panels I did that camera move in so that you, my dear audience, can better see Fancy's expression. I think by doing so the drama is amped up.
And then the crashes! OOF. Doing these panels made me realize I don't have very many words for sound effects and probably need to develop more. Anyway, fun drawings of crunching jets. It's not clear what crashed in the middle panel, but I hope you inferred that it was two of Lawrence's jets, 'cause it was.
After I finished page 120 and had moved on... or tried to move on, I realized I didn't like the way I ended that page. Here's what the original panel looked like:
Hey, don't be SAWWWWRRRRY, you delivered something very cool! GREAT jet action!
ReplyDeleteYour instincts are correct - like they always are - it would be a mistake to have Fancy double back. It would screw up the story flow and the bad guy would get away (not to mention -- what could she do for the downed pilots anyway, you know?).
As it is, we have a moment of suspense, wondering how the teammates will be -- and if we'll have to wait another two whole weeks to find out!
Okay, enough of my whining -- let's get to the BIG great thing about these pages...
... that last frame!
Yowza! That's a very cool angle (and the contrail is super cool as well). It gives us a new, dynamic angle, it shows where everybody is and we know that the bad guy is getting the drop on our hero. It's perfect!
And - if you ever did this story in fully completed form - seeing the earth below would be jaw dropping!
VERY nice pages. Despite what you're saying, I think you know EXACTLY how to end this story and I can't wait to see it!
Illustrated Ghost