Sunday, 24 October 2021

Going Back

Hello Readers.

I hope you will remain readers after today... we shall see because, well... 

Did I ever mention I'm terrible at telling jokes, and by extension, stories?  Well, yes.  Unlike you, IG, I'm one of those people who get half way through telling a joke or story when they realize that they missed delivering some pertinent information that is required to make the punchline or the story really work.

More on that after the pages.


Page 78

Page 79

Ok first, about the artwork, composition and panels on these pages.  I love them.  I think they turned out great.  Great drawings, interesting angles, especially the last on page 79.  I know it is kind of hard to see the people in the bottom right of the panel, but whether you do or not, I think the composition provides a sense of foreboding.  

I get that the man in the longer tunic looks a lot like Lawrence and I agree, it can be confusing as to who this person is.  I hope that will come clear as you see more pages.

I also get that there isn't much info delivered here.  This sequence takes a few pages.  Hang in there!

But about my deficiency as a story teller... I got to the start of page 78 and realized that I hadn't given ANY backstory to Lawrence and to make his actions clear and understandable, I was going to have to. Remember, the storyteller who didn't give pertinent information soon enough?  Yep, that's me!  I did it again!

Much as I didn't want to do a flashback, I couldn't see how to tell his backstory in any other way.

Ok, so for these pages and the next few, it's not a big deal, and the telling is fairly straight forward... but... UG... I gotta go back and add more backstory, which means inserting pages between ones you have already seen.  I'm not sure how I'm going to do that.

I might just post those pages as usual and then tell you where they go, and then after  a few weeks, add those panels into the posts so it looks all seamless like.  Who will know the difference?  Just you and me, IG!

1 comment:

  1. Hey, what's a little shoehorning-in of exposition, between friends?

    If adding stuff to the order makes your story deeper and richer, add away. It may be a bit confusing here at the blog, but it'll be worth it.

    I like these pages a lot and agree that your drawings are great.

    You might want to add a bit more complexity to the dialogue of the protesters. Maybe give us their point of view, so they don't become too "evil villain-y", you know?

    I LOVE the very last panel! SO much detail there and I totally saw our characters at the bottom right -- and destiny on the top left! Looking very good. Can't wait to see more!

    Illustrated Ghost


Thanks for your input!