Sunday 24 January 2021


 Hello Hello! 

Another week, another instalment. The page count is adding up!

Page 24

In the first panel, I like Dave pops the beautiful warm, spring-time romantic balloon that was established in the previous page with his abrupt interjection.  I also like how the characters are placed - it makes me feel like I am somehow there too.

Remember that regular pattern of how I introduced each bidder and their jets etc... yes we haven't seen the "hardware" used by Red Training Systems (yet!!), but perhaps you noticed another pattern happening on previous pages - each representative wondered out loud if Fancy was physically capable of flying with her foot/ankle injury.

Mr. Russell (the gentleman) doesn't go there, instead he gives her a gentle way out of having to explain anything. Nothing he says or does suggests he thinks she is anything but entirely capable.

Because I wanted and needed to show Fancy's ankle giving way, I had to do so by showing her starting to walk. I think the 2nd and 3rd panels show that pretty well. I thought we needed to see the whole action to make it make clear.

And yes, the final panel is nice too even if the drawing isn't great - it shows the romantic moment and mood re-established. Let's hope I can keep it up!

1 comment:

  1. Nice. Very nice, sweet moment It's good to have some emotion in your story and not just action or technical stuff. VERY nice!

    One thing? If you're trying to make this romantic, you could always go a step further. When Fancy stumbles, she could fall into the arms of Mr. Russell. Then they could have an awkward but romantic close up moment.

    Keep up the good work!

    Illustrated Ghost


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