Do you ever get a better idea for the project you're working on the second you finish it? Well that's what happened here. These were done for my Christine's monthly orchid society newsletter. I knew that by doing a second cartoon would exceed the amount of time allotted to work on it, but I had to do it. I knew the right hand was better and funnier.
And it's almost Christmas! I can afford to be generous, right?! Right.
Regarding the cartoon on the right, I like the line work (a round brush flattened so it naturally creates some thick and thin. I have to keep rotating the brush (if you're listening Adobe, I'd like a "brush rotation" hotkey for Christmas!) to work as I want where I want. It's also a dark blue line, which is really quite nice and not harsh like a black line. The jewel on the left side king's hat is pretty good, but I really like the body language of the characters and the way the one king's elbow overlaps the other. It really helps both to show their proximity; they weren't so close in the rough, but it looks better and funnier if they are crowded together a bit and it also to suggests one is elbowing the other. The colours could have been nicer, but (confession time), I'm not very good at imagining colours.
I know the word bubbles are a bit unconventional in that the tail is just a line, not a sharp ended thing, but I think it still works AAAAND, in my defense, I'm sure I've seen it done somewhere (just can't remember where). It was only when I finished the bubble on the right did I decide to break the line which as you all know is the way to show someone is whispering, which really improves that comment.
But enough about what I think. Which do you like better and why? And of course, any comments about improvements are gratefully received and learned from.
Fanks!
I think the comic on the right is waaaaaaay better than the original one. It's pretty funny and very well drawn. I like the overlapping. I like the jewel. I even like the voice balloons!
ReplyDeleteNice work!